Thursday, October 25, 2007

SONG FOR MAMA

AS A CHILD YOU TAUGHT ME EVERY THING I NEEDED TO KNOW, YOU WAS THE ONE PERSON WHO TOLD ME I CAN BE ANYBODY I WANTED TO BE. MAMA YOU THERE TO CARE FOR WHENEVER I NEED YOU,TAUGHT ME RIGHT FROM WRONG. I JUST WANTED TO LET YOU KNOW HOW MUCH I LOVE YOU

2 comments:

Adam Nathanson said...

Oletha,

That is a very powerful emotional relationship described in your selection! There are plenty of specific examples of the incredible bond between mother and child all around us. Could you focus on one or two, perhaps one from real life and another from a movie? Remember to give precise details to strengthen the logic of your writing.

Watch out for incorrect verb conjugation like "you was" instead of "you were," unless you're directly quoting a song or film that said it that way.

Looking forward to next class,
Adam

Adam Nathanson said...

Oletha,
I eagerly await your response to Thursday's GED Essay prompt that you began on paper in class last Thursday.
See you tonight,
Adam